|The hexagon of heroes. As time goes on, the symbol will be completed, and the true story will come to light.|
|Follow the encounters that will shape the universe forever.|
1. Cosmic Crusader
2. OCT Work
3. Game Design Work: Chaos Run / Super POO Bros 3 / Kaizo Minecraft World
ArenaOCT-Round 1“AS YOU KNOW, THIS TOURNEMENT SHALL BE THE GREATEST IN THE HISTORY OF THIS PROUD ARENA AND SHALL BECOME ONE OF THE MOST RENOWNED DAYS IN ALL THE KINDGOM AND AS SUCH I THANK YOU ALL FOR COMING FROM YOUR HOMES TO EXPERIENCE IT WITH ME! NOW AS OUR GLADIATORS JOIN WITHIN THE RING FOR THIS MONUMENTOUS OCCASION, ALLOW ME TO REMIND YOU OF THE REASON THIS TOURNEMENT IS OF SUCH IMPORTIANCE…”
Of course, all that Glub heard was…
“BLAH, BLAH, BLAH! YADDA, YADDA, YADDA! JIBBERJABBER LA LA LA I’M GUNNA YAMMER LIKE THIS FOR A REALLY LONG TIME CAUSE I LIKE HEARING MYSELF TALK HA HA HA SUCKS FOR YOU!”
So he was understandably impatient as he stood in the arena, tapping his foot and melting beneath the boiling hot sun. He couldn’t even yell at whoever was blabbering because of how thirsty he was. He reached for the plastic water bottle in his pocket and let the few remaining drops slip down his dry throat.
“This thing better start soon or I
Relyk: Good writing, you showed your character off well, and gave great respect for your opponent. While slightly confusing, you were able to ground your characters in the world well. You also built the world more by adding in NPC’s making it feel more alive.
Chaos: I really like the humor in your round, you did an excellent job showcasing the personality of both Glub and Mafdet and that made it much more natural to read. There were a few typos / missing words here and there, but nothing that was too distracting from the overall story, since they were so minimal. I think the barrels filled with water seemed too Deus-Ex-Machina, but that would have been prevented if you mentioned the barrels at the start of the round instead of right before Glub needed them. You also did a good job expanding the world of the Arena at the end of your round, as well as adding some backstory to Glub. Overall, a solid round.
Devon vs Chesches: Xpack Mix These chains chaife my skin. They are heavy like ringmail, but offer no protection. They bind me but unlike those that I’m willingly bound to, I feel enslaved. Forced to serve, to fight, to entertain.
It seems like I’ve been down in these catacombs for weeks. The fuzz on my chin gathers information that it has only been a few days.
When will they call me for my match? Clashes of weapons resonate beyond these walls, they clatter through my body. I was trained for war, but this is only a mockery. A farce. False combat...but If I treat it as such, I will meet my end.
“Dragon Rider, you are next!” The brute of a guard clanged on the bars, with his ring of keys,, waking Devon from his stupor.
“Who am I fighting?” Devon responded, half interested in what his new fate bestowed upon him.
The guard opened the cell and unlocked Devon’s shackles, pushing him forth. “What, and ruin a perfectly good surprise?”
Relyk: Good round, you paid great respect for your opponent's character, and added in some very clever humour. I could tell what exactly was happening, who was where, and why. The writing was witty and intelligent. Good work.
Chaos: You made your writing abilities clear in this round, quite phenomenal writing. I enjoyed your treatment of Chesches; it appears you got your character down quite well. However, there were a noticeable number of small typos or other grammatical and formatting errors and there were enough of them that it did detract from the overall flow in my opinion. The battle itself was well choreographed and thought out. It’s easy to leave out important details while writing battles, but I was able to visualize the fight in my head based off of your descriptions.
Relyk: Nice looking art style, but the words were WAY to small to read on some panels,along with messy pages. Your links that were supposed to lead to the next page, half the time didn't work, or sent me back to the SAME page I was on before. You also put the links as a random comment, not beneath your work.
Chaos: This round was pretty intense! The comic had nice pacing and your posing on both Chesches and Devon was consistently really well executed. However, while the flow was good, there were some panels where, especially in the later pages, it became hard to tell what was going on. There were a few pages where the dialogue was too small to read, even with zooming in, and some dialogue regarding the glitch-trick was cut off on the side. I feel badly that you lost access to your iPad; a loss of clarity accompanied it later on, but even still you were able to convey a whole lot of intensity and excitement with the art itself.
Relyk: Very good art style and very colourful visuals. The sketchy style make the work look unclean, but when paired with good colours, narrative, and characters, it can be forgiven.
Chaos: This was a very interesting round, since Chok is essentially mute. In my opinion the poem that accompanies the comic worked quite well, I was able to draw connections between the verses and the panels in most cases and that created a neat dynamic as I was reading it. The art itself, while a bit rough, is clear that this is part of your style, since I never felt that clarity was lost through the art. I would be careful, however, of little coloring errors; a few popped up here and there. The expressions were great and really drew me in while reading. A fun and colorful round for sure!
Relyk: Beautiful visuals and art design. I believe everything was done using a keyboard and mouse, VERY impressive! Aside from some spelling mistakes and poor grammar, the fight was intense, and you paid great respect to your opponent's character.
Chaos: This was a really fun round to read. 7-54’s lost memories and overall confusion about the situation led to some pretty funny moments. I liked your portrayal of Dawg, both in his personality towards 7-54 as well as in your art style. I also like the introduction of an over-arching plot there at the end as well as a more thorough examination of 7-54’s status as a robot and how Kaizin would be confused by him. On the other hand, there were a lot of spelling and grammatical mistakes, like missing letters. You finished your round lightning fast, so in the future I’d suggest maybe spending a little more time making sure the words and grammar are correct; I think that will help with your overall flow. Nevertheless, a really good round!